tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post7711341065941339650..comments2024-02-14T08:21:35.629+00:00Comments on The stammering poet: Beware of the flowers Poetry JamPeter Gouldinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-68989706435375416692011-07-04T20:52:13.971+01:002011-07-04T20:52:13.971+01:00Absolutely incredible! Dark as dark can get I thi...Absolutely incredible! Dark as dark can get I think.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-80040907574255836942011-07-04T20:11:01.848+01:002011-07-04T20:11:01.848+01:00Thanks very much everyone for the kind words.
Chri...Thanks very much everyone for the kind words.<br />Chris, Titus is a much better poet than I am. I react to what I like. Titus knows what constitutes a good poem!<br />Besides, you're pretty hot yourself, missus!Peter Gouldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-66241200769992412332011-07-04T16:51:17.033+01:002011-07-04T16:51:17.033+01:00Very MacBeth, scrubbing those fingers! It's al...Very MacBeth, scrubbing those fingers! It's always a pleasure watching you in my mind's eye building a poem and snatching at rhymes like this:<br />"Swift deadly nightshade, atropa belladonna –<br />several convulsions and she was a goner"<br />I enjoyed saying the whole thing out loud. <br /><br />Thanks, on a different note, for your comment about my poem ending on the word "hilarious." That's exactly the helpful kind of thing that tells me whether I've hit my mark with the reader or not. This public poetry posting stuff isn't just for fun...I want to learn, too, what impacts people. Titus's comment about your structure, for instance, resonates with me too.Enchanted Oakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14815997287116818456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-12782396668695596972011-07-03T20:56:22.422+01:002011-07-03T20:56:22.422+01:00ha that's deadly :D Literally, actually...but ...ha that's deadly :D Literally, actually...but yes. Nice!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05075292153806720848noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-71899475681053531302011-07-03T20:39:32.239+01:002011-07-03T20:39:32.239+01:00We have these very flowers growing on our fence. I...We have these very flowers growing on our fence. I do believe I'll be paying VERY close attention the next time Dr. M cooks!The Bughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07509037206264761261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-63162030348484362072011-07-03T20:05:56.379+01:002011-07-03T20:05:56.379+01:00Somehow I knew you would sink your teeth into this...Somehow I knew you would sink your teeth into this one!<br />Love this rhyme especially:<br /><br />Bright deadly nightshade, strewn on her coffin,<br />the cheapest old box I could see my wife off in<br /><br />Funny and nasty at the same time! Great job!<br /><br />... Miss Sexy New HaircutKat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-83929198284665245682011-07-03T18:10:44.679+01:002011-07-03T18:10:44.679+01:00Very effective, the repeat... Like a guilty consci...Very effective, the repeat... Like a guilty conscienceMargarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-86031032302051254122011-07-03T16:53:28.262+01:002011-07-03T16:53:28.262+01:00I won't be visiting you for dinner! Great poem...I won't be visiting you for dinner! Great poem!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-57591497635838866502011-07-03T16:12:26.615+01:002011-07-03T16:12:26.615+01:00Really interesting, the first two lines are lighte...Really interesting, the first two lines are lighter but the refrain darkens it with every verse, and that repetition increases the effect. Disturbing.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-83962315039643246712011-07-03T14:06:35.059+01:002011-07-03T14:06:35.059+01:00My first choice for darkside flowers, too. I like...My first choice for darkside flowers, too. I like the way those repetitions work. Fun to be in the villain's head now and then.barbarahttp://briarcat.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-28913382621580514022011-07-03T12:20:08.206+01:002011-07-03T12:20:08.206+01:00Interesting in showing a killer's mind and tho...Interesting in showing a killer's mind and thoughts. <br /><br />Great imagery at the end "growing on her grave"... guilt! Or not as he has "plans for the money".Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6689448175317552618.post-21353632088772521532011-07-03T11:32:56.216+01:002011-07-03T11:32:56.216+01:00great pomegreat pomeDon't Feed The Pixieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05380146661526476947noreply@blogger.com